Here is my rough thesis.
-The mark of a strong leader is the ability to recover from personal mistakes, as can be seen by the actions of Agamemnon, Achilles, and Zeus.
Should I include more than just these 3 subjects? Otherwise I was just planning on using different textual evidence from each of them for the entire paper. Good idea? Bad? I don't know.
Your scrutiny is welcome. Thank you!
5 comments:
The idea is fine - the end of the thesis is a bit clunky in terms of the language.
You might want to include Hector and Diomedes, but you'd have to find a different way of making your thesis specific. Listing these five characters would not be fluid.
I would make the names into a generalization, so that you wouldn't get pigeonholed into just looking at those three men, and it'd be significantly less clunky.
Something like 'men of power'.
But less dumb-sounding. I'll leave it to you to do some wordsmithing.
As far as the rest of the paper goes, I'm doing something like what I think you are doing.
I have my intro+thesis, then a paragraph of explanation (of the general story line as it pertains to my thesis) before going into my facts. I have 3 characters i'm looking at and have about 3 paragraphs for each of them describing different times during the story.
I don't know if that helps, but i think that answers some of your question.
Thanks Ms. Dahlin!
I like "men of power", Casey but I sorta say that earlier on...hmm...I'll think of something.
How about this?
-The mark of a strong leader is their ability to recover from personal mistakes, shown through men of power in "The Iliad".
"men of power" generalizes them. I guess I don't know how....academic it is but I think it gets the job done.
What do you think?
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